Revised Opening
Story Summary:
Price (primary character) must go to Alice, an ex-girlfriend (primary opposition) and get her forgiveness so he can return to Olympia and have a second chance, one final grasp at the kind of happiness he had 30 years ago (his goal). Plagued by a shameful past, Price must face down his dragons as he sets out to find Alice in Olympia’s community theater labyrinth. But can he find Alice, get her forgiveness, and find the happiness he’s looking for when Alice, the gadfly eccentric queen of Olympia’s theater scene and center of Price’s past social circle, hates Price and tries to rally all the old friends against him (Alice’s goal)?
Inciting Incident: While searching for a handgun in a storage unit, Price discovers a hypnotists report from 30 years ago he’d dismissed at the time and forgotten. Reluctantly he reads it. Something in the report upsets him. He mutters, “Alice,” stuffs the gun in his coat, and heads-out.
Initial Surface Problem: Price returns to Olympia to find Alice. But Alice has not met him at the appointed place and time. He sets out to find her. (He seeks happiness and a second chance in Alice’s forgiveness.)
Story Worthy Problem: Since childhood, Price has been in state of denial about hating his sister. He’s riddle with guilt and self-hatred. He believes only a very bad people would hate their sister (even though he has amble reasons). Subconsciously, he can’t understand why Alice loves him. He’s a bad person. So there must be something wrong with Alice. What kind of woman would love a man who hates his sister? He is such a loathsome person. However, Price can only find the peace and happiness he seeks by forgiving himself and accepting the fact that hating his sister doesn’t make him a bad person.
